Power armour guide: crit thread

[Skrall]

What dya guys think of the first three parts? there more to do but this shows how the armour works. sorry for the pics, i can\'t scan or take any pictures of my own design which are a damn site more complex so i had to use paint.

Hawke

[Starscream]

It takes the fans to this. I haven\'t seen anything like this by GW.
A little sketchy :side: but completaly comprehensible.
Thanks!

[The Dim Reaper]

Starscream double posting?

Never!?! :P

Dim

[Skrall]

What double post?
Anyway, anyone got any other crit. as i say sorry for the sketchs its word paints fault....

Hawke

[Gaius Julius]

Some really good info there, but just a shame about the diagrams.

GJ

[The Dim Reaper]

damn, she deleted it......

[Skrall]

No no, that was me. I\'m a mod and everything

Hawke

[Indra]

Yeah I liked it Hawke. I used my Mod powers to post there though, so sorry if you didnt want it there. Nice effort.

[Skrall]

No, thats why i created this thread *deltes messaage and wants it moved*

[wakopanda]

Im gonna do what hawke knows i always do, and rip it to shreds mercylessly :)

basicly, you dont really have that much information, and the pictures dont help that much. rather than trying to have a poorly done (although i know what paint is like, so i dont blame you) diagram per paragraph, try having just a few well done ones spread out over the article.

also, id try to include some pictures. A picture of a full suit of power armour would be a good one to start off the article and go with your introduction. also, you need to flesh the intro out a bit more. list the basic uses of the armour, which you have started but not completed:

-Personal protection
-Life support
-Enviorment protection (high pressure, vacuum, underwater ect)
-Heavy weight lifting/resistance to extreme forces (ie able to support a lascannon on one shoulder)

Next, id have a section on the construction and design of the armour. it would make sense to bundle together all the info on multi layerd and cross hatching construction, the material (ceramite of some kind), the fibres to make it mobile, the power source backpack and also the helmet.

then, perhaps theres a section you could do on the varous varieties of power armour? i remember once seeing an article that detailed the specs of the different builds from MK1-MK8. not sure where the info comes from.

really, while i started off wanting to say it needed more info, im hard pressed to actually think of any to put down. its a good start though. nice effort hawke.

[Skrall]

I\'m sure you said something there mate :D
I know what ya mean, but i\'m covering basics then going into each part, hence why its in parts

Hawke

[TheSovereign]

Just a question: why have two threads for this? You could post it as an article then you wouldn\'t have to keep it at the top of the forum.

[Gaius Julius]

Yeah I was just thinking that. I think it\'s just so we don\'t clog his beautiful work up:D

GJ

[Skrall]

In one GJ, the other will be a full WIP artical on this forum, its gonna take some work so i don\'t want people spoiling it with there lovely(not) writing.

Hawke

[Starscream]

It wasn\'t a double post it was a triple post!
I managed to erased the third and Hawke erased the second post of my shame..
:P

[Aun O Vader]

OK Hawke, I\'ve been thinking about this article since you posted it, I just haven\'t got around to actually writing about it. First of all, I love the idea, its along a similar line to something I have been thinking about to follow on from my \"weapons\" articles. I also like the multi-part direction you have taken, breaking the armour down into its components.

However, for the flipside, I think it needs quite a lot more detail, although with your usual standard of work i\'m assuming that this will be forthcoming. And we need to find some way to get some better images in. Not sure what the best way will be to do this, maybe you will have to mail them to someone who has a scanner, or a very good image producing software.

overall, I think that with you working on this it has a lot of potential, it would be a pity to lose it\'s impact due to poor finishing.

[Skrall]

Its gonna be a week till i get to writn, i\'ll do some sketches for it later and add the next part or two

Hawke

[steve bruce]

Hey, I recognised your quote from the James Swallow book. Nice qoute, great book.
Steve
;)

[Skrall]

Hmm what quote? missed that... please show!!

Hawke

[Indra]

I missed it also. Clarification please!!!!!